martes, 20 de enero de 2009

A Charity Event

·A new live·

I´d like to help poor children.They hasn't anything,they can't go to school,they can´t eat,they haven't clothes.

If I sell my old toys in a second hand shop I win some money and with this I help for the poor children.They can get foods or clothes,or the governments can build schools,houses and hospitals.

I can give some of my clothes to the church and I work at the weekends to help the children.

3 comentarios:

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  3. Hi Pilar
    Thanks for posting your homework assignment. Here are my comments / corrections:

    I´d like to help poor children.They (hasn't) HAVEN'T GOT anything: they can't go to school,they can´t eat,they haven't GOT clothes.

    If I sell my old toys in a second hand shop I (win) WILL EARN some money and with this I CAN help (for) the poor children.They can get food(s) or clothes,or the government(s) can build schools,houses and hospitals.

    I can give some of my clothes to the church and I work at the weekends to help the children.

    WELL DONE. HOWEVER, YOUR TEXT DOESN'T FOLLOW THE OUTLINE (ESQUEMA) THAT WAS IN THE STUDENT'S BOOK. THIS IS A GREAT START! NONETHELESS, PLEASE TRY TO FOLLOW THE INSTRUCTIONS MORE CAREFULLY IN YOUR NEXT POST.

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